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SYNOPSIS
FOR CRYIN’ OUT LOUD is a story about Sarah, a domestic violence victim, who battles for the right to be rid of her
violent and abusive ex-partner and to bring up her children in a loving and safe environment.
It is a work of fiction, based on the true story of Sharon Ann Kilby Sharon@kilby18.freeserve.co.uk It is a story which rings true for many women.
Sarah is the mother of four children aged ten, eight, nineteen months and four months.
After a three year rocky relationship she finally plucks up the courage to leave her fiancé Greg, but he is a ‘Jekyll
and Hyde’ control freak, hell bent on revenge who pursues her with merciless intent and savage brutality.
She finds the police incompetent and ineffective in their ability to deal with her ex, the Court Welfare officer too
‘neutral’ and, to her horror, that the Social Services are siding with Greg and ganging up on her.
She becomes aware that her children, also victims of child abuse, are repeatedly framed by the Police and Council in
a bid to assist Greg in his desire to have her older children removed into ‘care’ and to gain custody of their
two babies.
In her fight for truth and support she learns that history is repeating itself - Greg’s ex-wife Cara, who is
still intimidated and harassed by Greg, also suffered ‘battered wife’ syndrome and was denied all contact to her
children because of unscrupulous Authorities. Her children were brought up by
Greg abused, terrified and oppressed and everyone within the social and school welfare system failed to protect them.
Sarah and her children experience what they perceive to be a Spiritual enlightenment.
As a result they believe that the way to right wrongs on a personal level and also on a global one is through total
faith and allegiance to God and not just in the sense of prayer, but more importantly, by taking practical, more courageous
measures.
The family find themselves up against an unfair justice system in a corrupt, male-dominated world. As a result her children end up registered ‘At Risk’ and the family are then unjustly and wrongfully
badgered by a whole range of child welfare experts and psychiatrists.
Sarah battles to expose those who have wronged her. Having no confidence
in the Media and distrusting the postal system she resorts to printing up her story in her own newsletter and going door to
door delivering it in her home town.
The result is phenomenal. Public support is immense and news of her experiences
and of shady authorities travels fast. The outcome of this long hard struggle
is that Greg’s son, Lee, tells Sarah a bigger, more murkier story - that of the secret, seedy society of Manumits. The Manumits are a brotherhood comprising the most influential, powerful members of
society - their allegiance being the protection of brethren at all costs. They
trample on and ‘fix’ other people’s lives despite the fact that they are breaking all the laws of the land. Because of his troubled conscience and his love for God, Lee, an ex-Manumit, risks
his life in a bid to protect his younger half-brother and half-sister from the same abuse that was inflicted on him by their
father.
Throughout, conspiracies and cover up abound concerning Lee and his sister and Sarah’s children. But, due to Lee’s brave actions, the question of institutionalised corruption within the Manumit
set-up is eventually brought into the spotlight and the beginning of the end is nigh for Satan’s wicked plan to rule
the world.
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attached rating sheet, most aspects of FOR CRYIN’ OUT LOUD are deemed to be of an accomplished professional standard.
This convincingly believable story is written by a well-educated author with a wide vocabulary range and generally very good
sentence construction. The ‘readability’ is generally good. The grammar, flow and quality of narrative is generally quite good and any quibbles
of the book are of a relatively minor nature. The narrative powerfully conveys
the hardships, heartache, fear, horror and despair of women who suffer at the hands of a dangerously abusive male partner.
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RATINGS [4-stars indicate an accomplished professional standard]
Presentation
**
Overall
Clarity ****
Grammar
***
Setting
****
Narrative
**** [Good]
Characters
****
Dialogue
****
Originality
**** [We know of no similar story]
Interest
**** [Conveys subject matter well]
Consistency
****
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CHAPTERS:
Chapter 1: The takeaway
Chapter 2: Flashbacks
Chapter 3: Two different tales
Chapter 4: A rotten discovery
Chapter 5: David and Anna
Chapter 6: Jason and Jessica
Chapter 7: A taste of things to come
Chapter 8: School's out
Chapter 9: Words and Roses
Chapter 10: Bedevilment
Chapter 11: Heavenly messages
Chapter 12: Distressing disclosures
Chapter 13: Bows and arrows
Chapter 14: A meeting with Melanie Morris
Chapter 15: Directions
Chapter 16: A Christmas message
Chapter 17: Cara
Chapter 18: An Undertaking
Chapter 19: Valerie Nuttall
Chapter 20: Miss Jones and the neighbours
Chapter 21: A showdown with Drinkwater
Chapter 22: The burn
Chapter 23: A CCTV set up
Chapter 24: Neighbourhood hoodlums
Chapter 25: The start of supervised sessions
Chapter 26: Unexplained phenomena
Chapter 27: A tiny fire
Chapter 28: The Accused
Chapter 29: 'At Risk'
Chapter 30: More meetings and a magistrate named Birtwhistle
Chapter 31: Puppets and an appeal
Chapter 32: An MP, more of the same and a parting of the ways
Chapter 33: A Horsy story
Chapter 34: Hollow head and Onion
Chapter 35: The Gat gun fib
Chapter 36: The Butlins palaver
Chapter 37: A transfer to County Court
Chapter 38: The Coastguard collaboration
Chapter 39: The tide begins to turn
Chapter 40: Secret Societies
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